For Love or Money?

The title of this article is called, "For Love or Money?", and i found it on Teenink, written by Kaleigh L. The opening paragraph does include the thesis, letting the readers know this article is about artificial impregnation. The first paragraph could use some work, but it wasn't horrible, since it gave an example of a popular television series involving it. The article includes 7 paragraphs, and they all relate to the thesis. To back up her opinion, the writer uses an example of a woman and the fact that she had artificial impregnation. The writer includes the woman's reaction and what the news thought about this. The writer is against artificial impregnation, but she also shows the she understands want a mother would want so many children to call her own. The writer does convince me that artificial impregnation is not good, for the fact that it's usually single mothers would can't afford to take care of the children. To improve the article, the writer could have included the mother's reactions to all the gossip and their first reaction when they hear of artificial impregnation. I thought the conclusion was effective because of her last line,"Clearly, the necessary measures must be taken to ensure that parents’ reproductive rights – or media ambitions – do not come before their child’s right to a decent life." I didn't notice any errors. I liked this article since it showed why it's bad for the mothers, but also showed that child services might approve of it because it puts more in their pockets.